I tried to set up the premise as being kind of ridiculous from the get-go, but I feel like my flag pole joke comes off as stale. I will take anything you can give me. Thanks for your time.
Tuesday, June 26, 2012
Amanda- Story Cardio
Dave- I have no idea if I even did this right. I feel like I fell into old habits or something. I feel this is off, but I don't know why. I consciously tried to remember things like composition, the 180 rule, etc.
I tried to set up the premise as being kind of ridiculous from the get-go, but I feel like my flag pole joke comes off as stale. I will take anything you can give me. Thanks for your time.
I tried to set up the premise as being kind of ridiculous from the get-go, but I feel like my flag pole joke comes off as stale. I will take anything you can give me. Thanks for your time.
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Hahahaha
ReplyDeleteAmanda you made me laugh with this one.
I actually love the set up of Dracula getting his license. quite possibly a good short film idea. Portlynn was concerned as you are with a time limit that story cardio puts on a story and I agree it's hard.
But what you've done well is create a great set up with dracula wanting to renew his license.
I didn't really understand the flagpole idea. I don't think you need it.
My other thought was in order for this to work you could've really pulled from the reality of the dmv. Waiting longer, the people behind the counter being more rude, the actual test and how many problems you can miss, the eye chart, also the juxtapose idea of dracula wanting to suck blood...etc etc etc.
boardwise I think you need to loosen up. being that these are thumbnails you need to loosen up and draw quickly which can allow you to search out more ideas in the time it takes to do story cardio.
pulling the camera out and using the Z axis in your work can allow more depth in your work.
push the depth and loosen up the drawing.
funny though. it made me laugh.
thank you
Dave
Whew! Thank you Dave! I'm never sure if I can be funny or not. I agree with the flagpole note- it really doesn't need to be there. I just thought of it when I decided on DMV and it made me laugh. I could have written it better.
DeleteI also agree that I should have spent a little more time setting up how awful the DMV is. I was too worried about time. "Draw and learn."
I am thinking of new gags now- like Dracula tries to "shorten" the line by draining everyone waiting.
Actually, I worried a lot about using so much dialogue. I worried it would make for bad/boring boards.
I will utilize these notes for the Starship Troopers assignment- loose boards on the horizon! THANKS AGAIN!